tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3094499237689214536.post6120830276200866462..comments2015-04-27T11:39:48.655-05:00Comments on Epics Of India: Week 5 Storytelling: That Darn RavanaAnonymoushttp://www.blogger.com/profile/02293716037160475552noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3094499237689214536.post-49036305666594647682015-02-16T08:26:56.296-06:002015-02-16T08:26:56.296-06:00Hello Gloria, Your story is the most unique one th...Hello Gloria, Your story is the most unique one that I have read so far! I like how you decided to use all dialogue throughout the whole story especially in modern language. It makes it easy for readers to understand . <br /><br />This story is one of my favorite parts of the Ramayana. I felt like I was apart of the story more because I felt each characters personality. Great Job! Anthony Clarkhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16287279935923856704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3094499237689214536.post-20624824497513199262015-02-15T22:19:35.363-06:002015-02-15T22:19:35.363-06:00Gloria, I really liked this retelling of the story...Gloria, I really liked this retelling of the story. The use of a more modern form of dialogue felt easier to read and was also amusing! Sometimes it gets difficult reading the Ramayana with the formal tone it's presented in, and you definitely took away the formal feeling. Your use of dialogue also gave the characters a lot more personality which made it more enjoyable to read. Ravana was portrayed as stubborn and selfish and Sita felt a little air headed and naive. You did a great job, and your writing style was excellent!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05889698860511772046noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3094499237689214536.post-91267938598220836782015-02-15T22:12:08.998-06:002015-02-15T22:12:08.998-06:00Hello Gloria! I really liked the way you rewrote t...Hello Gloria! I really liked the way you rewrote the story of Sita’s abduction. It was interesting that you started off by Maricha knowing he would die if he helped Ravana capture her. Also, I really enjoyed how Lakshama was skeptical about letting Rama go after the deer. The way you described the deer as being holographic was a very creative way at looking at it! Overall great job. The way it was divided into chapters made it very easy to read. courtneysearleshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09669318899555398262noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3094499237689214536.post-61732925672589929272015-02-15T19:59:04.434-06:002015-02-15T19:59:04.434-06:00Gloria,
What a great twist on the story! I actua...Gloria, <br /><br />What a great twist on the story! I actually really like that you used modern language. Sometimes I find that these stories can become confusing, so using modern language is a good way to make it more understandable and clear. I find that I like using modern twists as well! You used mostly dialogue in your post which I also liked. It is good to put in background story, but sometimes using dialogue is a good way to make your story short, sweet, and to the point. Personally, that is my favorite kind of story. I also agree with you, adding dialogue is a great way to add personality! Great story with a clear focus! Good job! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17808096452335476814noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3094499237689214536.post-35091818277252512852015-02-13T14:35:06.944-06:002015-02-13T14:35:06.944-06:00Gloria,
I loved your story! I liked how you used s...Gloria,<br />I loved your story! I liked how you used so much dialogue. It made the story very interesting and also very funny. I liked the part where Lakshmana was thinking that Sita was stupid. and that he was never fooled by the deer! I also like the part that you put in about Ravana talking to Maricha about helping him. It really shows how selfish Ravana is. He doesn't care if Maricha dies. He just wants Sita.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07706231185009988511noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3094499237689214536.post-65531608068578121522015-02-12T18:29:50.440-06:002015-02-12T18:29:50.440-06:00Gloria, I like how you decided to only use dialogu...Gloria, I like how you decided to only use dialogue. It really keeps the reading pace fast and the reader intrigued. Furthermore, I liked how you showed several characters as annoyingly selfish. For example, Ravana in chapter one and Sita in chapter two are so selfish they just care about what they want over Rama’s and Maricha’s safety. I also loved that you made Lakshmana the voice of reason. He said exactly what I was thinking in chapter four.Kristen Ritchiehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05048118438891834247noreply@blogger.com